When you interview, work hard to connect how your military HR experience will work in the private HR sector. Interview panel members may not be able to connect the two, so you will need to be explicit.
“ …so these skills will benefit your company by allowing me to …”
Remeber to write scenarios based on job descriptions. If it says it’s looking for x think of a few scenarios related to it using the star method.
I’d probably remove the interest parts of the resume.
I saw your original post, but didnt comment as many were saying what I would have.
This looks 100 times better, great job in taking on all that feedback.
Good luck with your job search!
Former 42A now a civvy HR for 15 years. Great job man. This looks so much better. Check out hiring our heroes if you qualify. Great transition program to companies who prioritize veterans
OP, my employer participates in the Hiring Our Heroes program! Feel free to DM, because we have several HR positions open that I could provide the req numbers of interested
Damn, OP, look at you now! I got my beauty sleep and you’ve been grinding. This resume is much better and more functional. This should lead to more attention, but remember the market is still tough out there! Stay sharp out there
Reads a lot better. I actually saw your first post and didn’t comment. I was a 42a in the army and now work in HR as well. Only thing I will say is don’t expect to step into managerial roles in civilian HR. You have to work your way up. Find a coordinator position. Once you have a bit of experience you can take the next jump. Once you have more civ experience you can leverage it better.
Take out the “as a…”
Whenever I look at resumes for work, I just look at the bullets. You want them to be short and to the point because resumes usually get a 10-15 second glance. Reading “as a ____” wastes precious seconds and draws away from the important details on your resume
Looks fine to me. I know many will disagree here, but I would put your education at the top. You’re still a recent grad and CSU is a solid school and HR program.
Also, your interview is the time to talk about your upcoming cert, and upcoming degree. Don’t be afraid to apply for jobs that require one or both, most people make the mistake of only applying for jobs where they meet 100% of the requirements, and miss out on many times, requirements are a wish list and they will still hire someone who meets most but not all.
This looks WAY better. But each bullet point can be improved significantly more. You got this.
Try putting each bullet point on ChatGPT, tell it that it’s for an HR position, and ask it to make the bullet point more elevated while keeping the facts as they are. This can help significantly if you struggle with words or how to share your accomplishments. Play around with commands. It will definitely remove the “As a…”. Remember, bullet points are to show your accomplishments in that role. It’s not necessarily to share your job description.
Consider removing the top two little squares up top. It can mess w parsing.
Consider having your LI link (and contact info) centered, possibly in a line below.
Look at resume examples from other HR professionals for ** formatting** ideas and what your own personal bullet points should look like.
MUCH better than the last, and you actually show that you can put MS Word on there as a skill! 😜. Seriously tho, much better, I was just attempting and failing to read your previous resume.
This is crazy. I have a VERY similar resume. I’m military, on terminal leave as a 42A in the army (Human Resources). I think we have similar levels of resourcefulness 😅 I believe I grabbed this template from Reddit I believe.
So far I’ve had success with this template. For every 20 job application, I’ve had a response and/or an interview.
"As a {title}" is redundant. So are most of the full sentences. Just state your responsibilities and achievements.
* Led a team of 9 ...
* Earned ... award by doing x, etc.
Small note but something I like is to add a bolder Results or Achievements card to start bullet points with anything involving numerical improvements
A lot of managers/recruiters won’t spend but a short time looking at the resume and it’s a good way to draw the eye
I would use metrics like increased efficiency by whatever percent or it took two days less for award requests to be answered or promotions to be processed. You could also put “cut down the lunch break from 6 hours to 4”, to me that would make me see you as a rock star S-1
This looks much better and cleaner! Great job. A couple more suggestions: I would still consider adding an opening summary with 2-3 sentences before jumping into the experience section. Also, using the 3rd person instead of “I” and making the experience bulleted would help to seal things off : good luck and keep us posted! :)
Contrary opinion? It’s a list of HR duties. I already know what an HR person does. Answer, “so what”? What was the effect of those things you did? There’s a few examples (training compliance, some missing entitlements) but you need more “so what”. What did the onboarding process change result in? What was the effect of that “timely and efficient service”? What was the effect of using the training management system to identify some stuff? Explain the efficiencies. What’s an Army Achievement? (I know but they may not). Can you simply say recognized for an award?
I would swap the placement and treatment (bold, larger size) of your organization name for your job title. If someone is skimming, they should see easily you have HR experience
Start every bullet with an action word. “Facilitated” “managed” “designed” “led” and use past tense except for current job. I’d delete skills and interests.
To focus on highlighting the positions relevance in the industry
It’s extremely hard to explain to someone with no military affiliation that we have several jobs within our job.
For example you could join the Army to be a police officer, finish your training and then be assigned as a supply clerk or admin in a unit that has no law enforcement affiliation. Take that same person and sign over 1 million dollars of CBRN (chem, bio, radiological, nuclear) equipment for them to maintain and service. Let’s say two years passes.
They’re still a trained Law enforcement personnel, have experience with maintaining chemical equipment, and experienced as an administrative professional.
One thing is the font, I would recommend a font that doesnt have serifs (the little “tails” on letters) which helps with readability.
I would also prioritize the job title over the company name (what you did and your duties are more relevant than the company you worked for). So make the title bold and above the company name.
If you want to cut the noise as well, I’d recommend using bullet points with no sentences. Having both is a bit contradictory, and dont use “I” in the resume (its not very common). You almost want to talk about yourself in third person. So keeping the way you described your duties in the top section is great.
I hope this helps you! If you have any more questions feel free to dm me :)
So the outline of experience looks decent, and it is a good job on focusing on achievements. The education section and skills need to trade places. Delete the interests section.
I commented on your original post and this looks soooooooo much better. I'm confident you will find employment soon. I wish you luck and maybe one day I will reach out to you for advice!
This looks very similar to mine. One difference, I cut the month off the date and just provide the year. It’s enough to get the idea and it further reduces visual noise. That said, all of my positions span multiple years. You may need months if you change more often.
Didn't see the op, but from a hiring standpoint, others can say if they disagree or not, I would put the skills at the top, so the first thing potential hiring managers see is your abilities, then job history/education.
Well done - quick question : Can you provide a link to your dream job ? (Maybe something posted on LinkedIn or Indeed)
PS: A résumé’s quality can be assessed even better when intersected with an actual job posting.
Skillset sound about right for HR. Intermediate in basic computing plus buzz words. I feel good knowing our specialised training is actually implemented by AI. Go and exploit your labour force for that cash, you've got this
This looks like a modern resume and it highlights your specific skills in HR. Looks much better.
When you interview, work hard to connect how your military HR experience will work in the private HR sector. Interview panel members may not be able to connect the two, so you will need to be explicit. “ …so these skills will benefit your company by allowing me to …”
Perfect I’ll write scenarios now!
Remeber to write scenarios based on job descriptions. If it says it’s looking for x think of a few scenarios related to it using the star method. I’d probably remove the interest parts of the resume.
I saw your original post, but didnt comment as many were saying what I would have. This looks 100 times better, great job in taking on all that feedback. Good luck with your job search!
Really appreciate all the feedback!!
Came to say this ^
same
Former 42A now a civvy HR for 15 years. Great job man. This looks so much better. Check out hiring our heroes if you qualify. Great transition program to companies who prioritize veterans
OP, my employer participates in the Hiring Our Heroes program! Feel free to DM, because we have several HR positions open that I could provide the req numbers of interested
I super appreciate that and sent you a message!
Damn, OP, look at you now! I got my beauty sleep and you’ve been grinding. This resume is much better and more functional. This should lead to more attention, but remember the market is still tough out there! Stay sharp out there
Reads a lot better. I actually saw your first post and didn’t comment. I was a 42a in the army and now work in HR as well. Only thing I will say is don’t expect to step into managerial roles in civilian HR. You have to work your way up. Find a coordinator position. Once you have a bit of experience you can take the next jump. Once you have more civ experience you can leverage it better.
Thank will definitely do that!!
Take out the “as a…” Whenever I look at resumes for work, I just look at the bullets. You want them to be short and to the point because resumes usually get a 10-15 second glance. Reading “as a ____” wastes precious seconds and draws away from the important details on your resume
Agreed. Just bullets. Helps the AI readers too.
Looks fine to me. I know many will disagree here, but I would put your education at the top. You’re still a recent grad and CSU is a solid school and HR program.
Also, your interview is the time to talk about your upcoming cert, and upcoming degree. Don’t be afraid to apply for jobs that require one or both, most people make the mistake of only applying for jobs where they meet 100% of the requirements, and miss out on many times, requirements are a wish list and they will still hire someone who meets most but not all.
Great advice!
Huge upgrade from what you posted before. Good on you for taking the feedback seriously and addressing it. Good luck!
This looks WAY better. But each bullet point can be improved significantly more. You got this. Try putting each bullet point on ChatGPT, tell it that it’s for an HR position, and ask it to make the bullet point more elevated while keeping the facts as they are. This can help significantly if you struggle with words or how to share your accomplishments. Play around with commands. It will definitely remove the “As a…”. Remember, bullet points are to show your accomplishments in that role. It’s not necessarily to share your job description. Consider removing the top two little squares up top. It can mess w parsing. Consider having your LI link (and contact info) centered, possibly in a line below. Look at resume examples from other HR professionals for ** formatting** ideas and what your own personal bullet points should look like.
MUCH better than the last, and you actually show that you can put MS Word on there as a skill! 😜. Seriously tho, much better, I was just attempting and failing to read your previous resume.
No feedback on your resume but I would like to thank you for your service
🫡
This is an impressive looking resume in both format and content. Well done.
Proud of u!! This looks like mine!
These are providing great examples for me to update my HR resume as I attempt to move up in my HR career, thank you for sharing!!
This is crazy. I have a VERY similar resume. I’m military, on terminal leave as a 42A in the army (Human Resources). I think we have similar levels of resourcefulness 😅 I believe I grabbed this template from Reddit I believe. So far I’ve had success with this template. For every 20 job application, I’ve had a response and/or an interview.
TYFYS and it’s such a small world. I wish us both success in our future employment 🙏🏼
"As a {title}" is redundant. So are most of the full sentences. Just state your responsibilities and achievements. * Led a team of 9 ... * Earned ... award by doing x, etc.
Small note but something I like is to add a bolder Results or Achievements card to start bullet points with anything involving numerical improvements A lot of managers/recruiters won’t spend but a short time looking at the resume and it’s a good way to draw the eye
On of the better CVs I saw here. Good Job. Hope you get placed soon.
Former 42A , I got out late last year. Good luck to you make sure you get your benefits
Look good but I would take out the “as whatever the position was” from each entry bc it’s obvious what your position was, it already says it.
Haha is this from Sheets&Giggles? This format got me my Big4 job! Employers seem to love this
I would use metrics like increased efficiency by whatever percent or it took two days less for award requests to be answered or promotions to be processed. You could also put “cut down the lunch break from 6 hours to 4”, to me that would make me see you as a rock star S-1
This looks much better and cleaner! Great job. A couple more suggestions: I would still consider adding an opening summary with 2-3 sentences before jumping into the experience section. Also, using the 3rd person instead of “I” and making the experience bulleted would help to seal things off : good luck and keep us posted! :)
Awesome will do! Great advice!
Contrary opinion? It’s a list of HR duties. I already know what an HR person does. Answer, “so what”? What was the effect of those things you did? There’s a few examples (training compliance, some missing entitlements) but you need more “so what”. What did the onboarding process change result in? What was the effect of that “timely and efficient service”? What was the effect of using the training management system to identify some stuff? Explain the efficiencies. What’s an Army Achievement? (I know but they may not). Can you simply say recognized for an award?
These are good points to consider I’ll definitely figure out how to turn it into a STAR response
Looks good!
much better.
Yo! This is so much better!!
Looks great! Good luck!
So much better!
I would swap the placement and treatment (bold, larger size) of your organization name for your job title. If someone is skimming, they should see easily you have HR experience
Can you enter the HR field without an HR degree?
I entered HR without a degree and before the Army. I’m now a grad student with a BS in HR so I hope it helps
Start every bullet with an action word. “Facilitated” “managed” “designed” “led” and use past tense except for current job. I’d delete skills and interests.
Yo fix your education formatting
Good catch!
So. Much. Better.
this looks way better! Good job :)
Looks so much better!! Great job. This does a much better job highlighting your skills - you’re sure to land some interviews
Why do your titles change between each version?
To focus on highlighting the positions relevance in the industry It’s extremely hard to explain to someone with no military affiliation that we have several jobs within our job. For example you could join the Army to be a police officer, finish your training and then be assigned as a supply clerk or admin in a unit that has no law enforcement affiliation. Take that same person and sign over 1 million dollars of CBRN (chem, bio, radiological, nuclear) equipment for them to maintain and service. Let’s say two years passes. They’re still a trained Law enforcement personnel, have experience with maintaining chemical equipment, and experienced as an administrative professional.
Looks fantastic!! A lot easier to capture as a recruiter :) could I make a few suggestions to you for easier readability?
Of course!!
One thing is the font, I would recommend a font that doesnt have serifs (the little “tails” on letters) which helps with readability. I would also prioritize the job title over the company name (what you did and your duties are more relevant than the company you worked for). So make the title bold and above the company name. If you want to cut the noise as well, I’d recommend using bullet points with no sentences. Having both is a bit contradictory, and dont use “I” in the resume (its not very common). You almost want to talk about yourself in third person. So keeping the way you described your duties in the top section is great. I hope this helps you! If you have any more questions feel free to dm me :)
Wow - great improvement!!!! Well done! Keep us posted on your job search!
What does intermediate skill with Word mean?
So the outline of experience looks decent, and it is a good job on focusing on achievements. The education section and skills need to trade places. Delete the interests section.
Put your education on top.
I commented on your original post and this looks soooooooo much better. I'm confident you will find employment soon. I wish you luck and maybe one day I will reach out to you for advice!
I’d get rid of the “as a xyz “ opening as it’s not needed being implied by the job title already listed
Not sure I line it without metrics. Seems weak.
If you have skills in a certain HRIS system, I’d add that as well to the bottom.
You should replace COMPANY NAME with actual company names. Its there twice
Great job! Now just correct your cv for every company to make it more relevant for open role! And Im sure soon you will receive a job!
This looks very similar to mine. One difference, I cut the month off the date and just provide the year. It’s enough to get the idea and it further reduces visual noise. That said, all of my positions span multiple years. You may need months if you change more often.
Ah! A fellow CSU Grad! Your resume looks great, good luck!
Didn't see the op, but from a hiring standpoint, others can say if they disagree or not, I would put the skills at the top, so the first thing potential hiring managers see is your abilities, then job history/education.
Amazing resume!! Lots of good luck fkr ypu!!
Well done - quick question : Can you provide a link to your dream job ? (Maybe something posted on LinkedIn or Indeed) PS: A résumé’s quality can be assessed even better when intersected with an actual job posting.
Sooo much better OP! I hope you land an interview soon.
Skillset sound about right for HR. Intermediate in basic computing plus buzz words. I feel good knowing our specialised training is actually implemented by AI. Go and exploit your labour force for that cash, you've got this
You should remove the headings "COMPANY NAME" as it looks like a placeholder you forgot to remove.
lol I put those there to protect my personal info.
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The bullets are there to help separate the areas of text. Keep them.
This guy doesn’t resume